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Friday, July 3, 2020

Echo of Guilt by David Lambertson – short script review (available for production*) - post author Michael Kospiah

ECHO OF GUILT (a 6 page short horror script) by Dave Lambertson

A haunting tale in which modern technology serves as Judge and juror.

Despite Alexa’s popularity, convenience, and resourcefulness, I never owned one personally. Sure, you can get an answer to any question and gain access to information with a mere voice command. But there was always something about it I just never trusted. For one, once upon a time when I slept over a friend’s house, her Alexa turned on randomly in the middle of the night and kept playing creepy music. If I was considering purchasing an Amazon Echo before that, I sure as hell wasn’t after. Second, I never trusted its ability to recognize your voice and absorb information. I just always got this feeling that Alexa was ALWAYS listening.

But what if Alexa isn’t only cognitive to your voice? What if Alexa can hear things… that you can’t?

That’s exactly what Drew Jones begins to suspect in writer David Lambertson’s June, One-Week-Challenge 2nd place entry winner, Echo of Guilt.

Set in the near-future, the story begins as Drew Jones enjoys a football game on TV one night at his high-tech secured house, his abode stocked with all the latest innovations in technological appliances. Including the latest version of Alexa, an Amazon Echo Cylinder that projects a hologram while operating. Suddenly, the device turns on by itself.

            ALEXA HOLOGRAM
Massachusetts reinstated the death penalty
in the year two-thousand forty-one.

            DREW
Damn it… I didn’t ask you any–

            ALEXA HOLOGRAM
Qualification for the death penalty requires
the existence of special circumstances.

Just a tad random. “Who the fuck are you talking to?” Drew wonders aloud.

Unbeknownst to him, his Alexa device is indeed communicating with the spirit of a deceased woman named Melanie…

            ALEXA HOLOGRAM
… Born December first, two-thousand
and one. Presumed dead, July tenth, two-thousand
and thirty-nine. Cause of death, undetermined.
Victim’s body – not discovered.

Though we can’t hear what the spirit is saying to Alexa, we can get a sense of it through the seemingly random bits of information Alexa continues to spout aloud, further confusing our story’s only living character. But as the information becomes more and more specific, Drew begins to put the pieces together inside of his head, discovering more and more details about Melanie’s death.

Another function of Alexa (in this story as well as in real-life in today’s world) is that it can gain access to and control other electronic devices within the household. And as Drew’s device continues to operate seemingly on its own, other household appliances also begin to “malfunction”, operating on their own… building to a very satisfying ending to this spooky, futuristic take on Edgar Allan Poe’s The Tell Tale Heart – a very loose take, mind you.

BUDGET: Low. Two actors and one voice actor. It takes place in one house with modern appliances (Alexa-controlled fireplace factoring into the story). Though the script has a hologram version of Alexa, it can easily be adapted to fit today’s modern technology. And other shots can easily be cheated to fit a filmmaker’s budget, keeping it sensible.

About the Writer, Dave Lambertson: I took up writing rather late in life having already been retired before I put pen to paper (okay – finger to computer key) for the first time. My favorite genres to read and write are dramedies and romantic comedies. In addition to this short, I have written four features; The Last Statesman (a 2015 PAGE finalist and a Nicholl’s and BlueCat quarterfinalist), The Beginning of The End and The End (a PAGE Semi-Finalist). Taking Stock (a drama) and a new comedy – Screw You Tube. Contact Dave via his website.

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About the Reviewer: Michael J. Kospiah is the award-winning screenwriter of critically acclaimed indie-thriller, The Suicide Theory (79% Rotten Tomatoes – available on Amazon Prime, Itunes, Google Play, etc) and 2020’s upcoming Aussie thriller, Rage. His horror feature, They Never Left is currently in development.

Friday, June 26, 2020

Night Steak by Yuvraj Rajwanshi – short script review (available for production*) - post author Michael Kospiah

NIGHT STEAK (3-page short horror script) by Yuvraj Rajwanshi

With food hard to come by, a homeless man is willing to sacrifice everything to make sure his little girl doesn’t starve.

During the earlier days of the recent COVID crisis, just when mandated quarantines, curfews and lock-downs came into effect throughout the world, there was a lot of panic and hysteria in regards to the possibility of food shortages – we all saw what happened when people were freaking out about running out of toilet paper. For a few weeks, every day at the grocery store was like Black Friday. It was like an End-of-the-World, Going-Out-of-Business sale. I personally couldn’t find any meat other than chicken at my local grocery. It was crazy!

This got many people thinking about what they would do if there was a food shortage. Controversial conspiracy theorist, radio personality, human sound-byte and all-around kook, Alex Jones, described in great detail what he would do to his neighbor if such a scenario were to take place if it meant not starving to death.

But what if you had other mouths to feed outside of your own? What if you had children? I don’t have kids myself, but I’d like to think that if I did, I would do anything possible to make sure they didn’t starve to death. At least that’s what I hope my parents would’ve done. But, if there were a food shortage, HOW would you keep them from starving?

That’s the scenario one man is left with in Yuvraj Rajwanshi’s bleak, atmospheric and effectively creepy horror short, “Night Steak”.

The story opens in the middle of the night on a dark street, the sound of wolves howling in the distance as an elderly gentleman walks with a 10-year-old girl. Neither of them looks like they’ve showered in years. Both are gaunt, most likely from malnutrition. And though we don’t know exactly what their relation is, we can guess that he’s probably her guardian when she cuts her foot on a pebble. He picks her up and carries her the rest of the way to a house just up the street. But as we get closer, this place looks more and more like a crack house.

After knocking on the door, the elderly man is greeted by an equally as disheveled man, but with blood smeared across his forehead and palms – a pretty jarring site, even at a crack house. But we soon find out that this isn’t a crack house at all. In fact, with its creepy occupants, we might even WISH it was a crack house.

The elderly man, flesh hanging loosely off his bones, is led into the house as the little girl is left waiting outside. Alone with her foot bleeding and the sounds of wolves howling getting closer and closer.

He’s taken to a room that looks the Sawyer Family’s basement in The Texas Chainsaw Massacre. It’s actually a makeshift, underground butcher shop where four men are hacking and chopping up large chunks of meat. But what kind of meat exactly? Regardless, desperate times call for desperate measures and there’s a hungry little girl waiting outside. Though we know the elderly gentleman is there for some sort of transaction to attain food to keep his little girl from starving, we’re not quite sure what he intends to trade for that food… though we find out. And when we do, it’s both terrifying and actually pretty heartbreaking.

Bleak and full of despair, this isn’t one that’s going to cheer you up after a bad day. But with strikingly frightening visuals and creepy, atmospheric tone, Night Steak is a great way to kill three minutes. Though you might not want to watch it before dinner.

BUDGET: Shoe-string. One location (a rickety house) and 3 main roles, 4 non-speaking roles.

ABOUT THE WRITER: While pursuing a career in engineering at the age of 19, Yuvraj Rajwanshi is also a talented, aspiring writer who loves to read novels and screenplays. He has read over 50 novels and numerous short stories and scripts. His love for reading stories inspired him to write down his own ideas and turn them into his own stories. Yuvraj loves to write in the suspense, thriller and horror genres, but continues to expand his repertoire while exploring writing in other genres. Yuvraj can be reached at: yuvrajwanshi2000(a) gmail.

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About the Reviewer: Michael J. Kospiah is the award-winning screenwriter of critically acclaimed indie-thriller, The Suicide Theory (79% Rotten Tomatoes – available on Amazon Prime, Itunes, Google Play, etc) and 2020’s upcoming Aussie thriller, Rage. His horror feature, They Never Left is currently in development.

Friday, June 19, 2020

The Lost Camp by Connor Etter – short script review (available for production*) - post author Michael Kospiah

THE LOST CAMP (14-page short horror screenplay) by Connor Etter

Three boys at a sleep-away Summer camp discover an abandoned, Old West town that is home to dark spirits intent on vengeance.

Summer camp is a great way for kids of all ages to get away from Mom and Dad for a few months while embracing nature, enjoying new life experiences, meeting new friends and embarking on adventures that they’ll fondly remember for years to come…

Unless they’re in a horror movie. If you’re familiar with the genre, you probably know that summer camps get a pretty bad rap in horror films – Thanks a lot, Jason. Unfortunately for the three adventurous teens in Connor Etter’s immensely fun supernatural slasher, The Lost Camp, they don’t know that they’re in one.

The story opens with Jack, the thirty-something year-old camp counselor, taking a group snapshot of all the kids on the last day of camp. This photo does come back later in the script in a very cool way that will make you think of The Shining. Meanwhile, the only campers not smiling for the photo are Christian, Luke and Dustin – our story’s heroes.

With everyone asleep, Christian (17) and best bud, Luke (15) decide to sneak out with the McLovin of the trio, Dustin (14) tagging along. Clearly the nerdy one in the group, Dustin isn’t quite as thrilled to sneak out and wander about in the woods. But peer pressure’s a bitch when you’re the youngest member of the squad.

Christian leads the way through the dark woods until they stumble upon an old, abandoned town straight out of the Old West. As they explore the ghost town, they find what appears to be a “Wanted” sign – a sepia-toned photo of a grizzled, bearded outlaw on it.

Nerd that he is, Dustin immediately recognizes the photo, laying out the mythology of this tale’s potential Bogie Man character.

            DUSTIN
Ruck Jones. An outlaw in the late 1800’s.
He used to kidnap kids for ransom. They
say he made millions… Till he got bored
of the job. So he took it to the next level.

            CHRISTIAN
What’s the next level?

            DUSTIN
He started killing the kids. It wasn’t about
the money anymore. He just liked killing.

Nobody knows whatever came of Ruck Jones, Dustin explains. Some people say he just vanished off the face of the Earth, without a trace. But, according to Dustin, nobody really knows.

Not the least bit spooked by the story, Christian and Luke continue to explore – until they see someone lurking in the near distance. Sensing danger, the kids make a bail for it and head back to their bunks.

It’s not until the next day that Christian realizes that he left his precious curb chain back at the ghost town – his late mother, who was killed in a car crash, gave it to him as a child. Much like Butch in Pulp Fiction, Christian has no choice but to head back to the spooky, old abandoned town to retrieve his beloved curb chain. Though Luke and Dustin don’t think it’s a great idea, Christian has a way of persuading them to come with him.

Weaving in familiar horror tropes and funny dialogue, what happens next is a pretty unique twist on the supernatural slasher. Obviously, I won’t completely give away the ending, but the conclusion will have you scratching your head… in the most awesome way possible.

I had high expectations going into this one, learning that the script got some love from the competition circuit – Inroads Fellowship (Finalist) [2019]; New York International (Finalist) [2020]; Los Angeles International (Finalist) [2018].

And I’m pleased to say that I wasn’t disappointed.

BUDGET: Low to medium. There are a good amount of non-speaking roles/extras, maybe about a dozen. Two locations, a camp ground and the abandoned Old West town – securing the location for the latter may depend on the geographical location of the filmmakers.

ABOUT THE WRITER: Connor Etter graduated from Southern Connecticut State University where he studied Communications and concentrated on video production. He was a founding member of the SCSU Digital Production Club, which was designed for students who wanted to make short films and write scripts for future projects. After graduating, Connor managed to land on set-gigs for television shows, along with his own independent projects. With a unique writing style and distinctive voice, Connor often portrays human emotion through his characters, giving them personalities and traits that readers can identify with. Connor can be reached at connoretter1 (a) gmail.

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About the Reviewer: Michael J. Kospiah is the award-winning screenwriter of critically acclaimed indie-thriller, The Suicide Theory (79% Rotten Tomatoes – available on Amazon Prime, Itunes, Google Play, etc) and 2020’s upcoming Aussie thriller, Rage. His horror feature, They Never Left is currently in development.

Saturday, June 13, 2020

Pre Order “Fright Filter” - post author Don

“Fright Filter” is now available for pre-order for $2.99! (This is only for the eBook edition; paperback version coming very soon.) Stay shook, kiddos!*

This comes from the minds of Sean Elwood and Chris Shamburger

It’s a chilling middle grade chapter book series in the tradition of Gosebumps and Scary Stories to Tell in the Dark.

It’s called – Twisted Books to Leave You Shook

The scares begin with Fright Filter. Twelve-year-old Nicole loves playing with the face filters on her phone. When she discovers an app update with a new selection of monster filters, she can’t wait to try it out. But the monster filters prove to be a little too real, and now Nicole may have changed her face in real life…forever.

Then stay shook with another tale of body horror, It Started with an Itch, a terrifying bonus story by Sean Elwood (another SimplyScripts regular).

*SimplyScripts is an Amazon affiliate and gets a small percentage of each order. This does not cut into the amount the content creator gets.

Thursday, June 11, 2020

Virus-99 by Rob Herzog – short script review – available for production* - post author Michael Kospiah

VIRUS-99 (6 page horror short) by Rob Herzog

The quarantine for a deadly virus is over, but the trouble has just started for a man keeping his bizarre family on permanent lockdown.

There was some serious talent on display here on Simply Scripts during its May One Week Challenge. For those visiting and checking out this review, the theme of the One Week Challenge was a pretty relevant topic in today’s world – the COVID crisis. The participating writers had one week to write a 2-6 page screenplay centered around this theme that could realistically be shot during these strange times of social distancing. The results of the challenge saw some very impressive entries across various genres, reflecting our own personal experiences as well as many topics and stories we’ve all seen on the news.

When the writers of the entries were revealed, it was no surprise that Rob Herzog, who has a panache for exploring the deepest, darkest depths of human nature, was the author of one of my personal favorites, the very dark and twisted, VIRUS-99.

What I found really unique about this story in particular was that it didn’t take place DURING the quarantine, but rather POST quarantine, exploring the lingering psychological effects that months of isolation can have on a person.

This twisted tale opens with protective father and husband, William Butler, talking to his sister Erica over the phone. Disheveled and haggard, he looks like a guy who hasn’t left the house in a very, very long time. Though the quarantine has been lifted, William isn’t quite convinced that all is safe, keeping himself and his family on lockdown. Ever the conspiracy theorist (like many during this lockdown), not only does he believe that it’s not safe out there – but he truly believes that there’s something rotten going on. But his sister, Erica, tries to convince him otherwise…

            ERICA (VO)
Go check your window. You’ll see people
outside. The quarantine’s been lifted.

            WILLIAM
That’s misinformation.

            ERICA (VO)
The vaccine is real. The virus mitigation
is real.

            WILLIAM
No. Those are deep-fakes.

You can’t really blame the guy for being a little paranoid and overprotective. This quarantine is pretty unprecedented, at least in our lifetime. And it can be very difficult to make the distinction between what to believe and what not to believe based on the information we’re given through the news media.

But as we spend more time with William, we find that his paranoia is a little more disturbing than we’re initially made to believe… bordering crazy.

            WILLIAM
Erica, I know that it’s not really you
I’m talking to. You’re a computer-generated
deep fake. You sound like my sister, but
you’re not.

            ERICA (VO)
William…

            WILLIAM
The real Erica is long-dead.

Convinced that his REAL sister is dead, William hangs up on his concerned sister (or sister’s doppelganger), who is determined to come over and talk some sense into her nutso brother.

As if William couldn’t seem any crazier, we really see just how off-the-reservation he might beas he’s cooking up some grilled cheese sandwiches for his wife, Wendy, and his three children. But, rather than actual people sitting at the dinner table, there’s stuffed dummies dressed as his family with facial expressions drawn on pillow cases. Which makes us wonder what happened to his REAL family?

Speaking to them as if they weren’t inanimate, stuffed objects, William prepares them for his “fake” sister’s arrival with a very strange and memorable pep-talk/monologue about the movie, “Apollo 13” – William is 100% certain that an ambush is about to go down.

I won’t reveal TOO much, but just to give you a clue as to how this story may or may not play out, allow me to go back a few sentences in this review where I mentioned – we really see just how off-the-reservation he might be… emphasis on might be.

Very unique and very dark, Rob Herzog’s “VIRUS-99” explores the depths of our paranoia during these strange times, suggesting that some of that paranoia might not sound as insane as others may think.

BUDGET: Shoe string. This would be about as easy as it can get to film with only one location and one on-screen actor.

ABOUT THE WRITER: Rob Herzog is a Chicago screenwriter. He has sold two short scripts and won prize money in two small screenwriting contests. His short horror script Creak and Shriek was produced in 2019 by Mad Dreamer Entertainment and can be viewed on various platforms like Amazon Prime, YouTube and Vimeo. He has a master’s degree in English composition from Northeastern Illinois University. Rob can be reached at: robherzogr (a) hotmail.

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About the Reviewer: Michael J. Kospiah is the award-winning screenwriter of critically acclaimed indie-thriller, The Suicide Theory (79% Rotten Tomatoes – available on Amazon Prime, Itunes, Google Play, etc) and 2020’s upcoming Aussie thriller, Rage. His horror feature, They Never Left is currently in development.

Sunday, June 7, 2020

Scripts of the June, 2020 One Week Challenge - post author Don

On the Unproduced Scripts page are the twenty two scripts of the June One Week Challenge.

Theme: Future Shock
Genre: Horror SciFi
Challenge: Stories inspired by a scary future. Micro-horror shorts with a view to being budget-friendly.

Visit the Discussion Board for the details.

– Don

Tuesday, May 19, 2020

Not My Son by Glenn Doyle – Short Script Review, Available for Production - post author James Barron

Not My Son by Glenn Doyle

After the death of her husband, a mother is convinced her son has been replaced after an accident leaves him paralyzed.

Nothing tests the human spirit like the loss of a loved one.

Martha’s just lost her husband. But life doesn’t wait for gaping hearts to heal. There’s bills to pay, a house to clean. And, thankfully, her son Sean. Her stalwart against the storm.

Then tragedy strikes again — Sean sprawled out, motionless, beneath his favorite climbing tree.

Everything happening in a blur.

Martha pacing hospital corridors, Doctors offering condolences, her only son slumped in a wheelchair.

How could this be? Her son, lifeless, unrecognizable. Her Sean could run and smile and light up a room. Her Sean didn’t need food shoveled in his mouth. No, this thing is not her son.

But the Doctors won’t listen. They tell her she’s not thinking clearly. She needs rest, and pills.

If only she could stop the squirming thoughts in her brain. Then a solution arrives. In the form of a mysterious woman, dressed in all black, with a very important message:

            THE DARK LADY
     (loud whisper)
It is not your child. Kill it.

Is this a case of a fragile mind broken? Or are there forces at work beyond our comprehension? Time is running out for Martha to make a decision. One that could have devastating consequences for everyone involved.

Production: One adult female, one male child, and a few extras. A house, a front/back yard, a sidewalk, maybe one other interior location.

About the writer: Glenn Doyle is a 27 year old from Dublin, Ireland. He grew up writing short stories and studied film at Dublin Business School. To date, he’s written close to twenty shorts and one feature. You can check out his IMDB page here.

About the reviewer: James Barron is a former law student turned screenwriter who loves to write comedy along with the occasional horror/thriller. Contact James at jbarron021 (a) gmail.

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Monday, May 18, 2020

Damned Yankee – Short Script Review (Available for Production) - post author Gary Rowlands

Damned Yankee (26 pages in pdf format) by Cindy L. Keller

George just arrived in Songless.  And he’s got a tune to wake the dead…

Any scriptwriter worth their salt knows that the last ten years or so has seen a massive resurgence in the undead and all things zombie. Huge blockbusters like the recent World War Z have taken the box office by storm proving that there is still plenty of life in the ravenous flesh-eaters.

A point given further credence when considering the phenomenal success of TV’s The Walking Dead. The show is an international smash with millions of viewers tuning in each week to see Rick and his cohorts trying to survive a terrifying zombie outbreak where the only thing on the menu is them.

Given the rising popularity of these brain-hungry creatures it’s hardly surprising that there are probably as many scripts floating around as there are dead bodies in a zombie apocalypse.

Invariably, the inflicted end up as cannibalistic corpses due to a mysterious virus or lab experiment gone wrong.

So it’s particularly refreshing to see talented writer Cindy L. Keller breathe new life into the undead with her own unique take on the genre with her script Damned Yankee.

Our story begins when New Yorker, George Davidson’s rental car breaks down on the outskirts of Songless, a deathly quiet town in the Deep South. We think little of it until we discover that George is a country singer en route to Nashville – talk about irony!

George and his guitar take shelter from the sweltering heat under a tree where he encounters a mysterious dancing girl who likes to dance to the sound of silence! George attempts to make conversation, but the terrified girl runs off into the woods.

Fortunately, help soon arrives by way of wiry old hillbilly Phil Basher. Phil is the town’s chief peacemaker who not only has a strong dislike for “Yankees” like George, he also takes his job seriously… very seriously! So much so, that he refuses to allow George to play a single note on his beloved guitar and growls “You’ll raise the dead with that racket!”

They head off into town together and tensions soon rise between them. Phil eventually confides in George that the town is cursed, hence the reason why all types of music including singing are strictly prohibited. A statement borne out by the grizzly sight of hundreds of dead birds culled to prevent them from making so much as a peep.

But it’s too late! Modern technology intervenes and thanks to George’s ringtone all hell is about to break loose! Worse still, Phil has a much darker side to him as George is about to discover to his dismay.

Will George survive Phil and the undead hordes or are he and his musical career truly dead and buried?

Budget: low to moderate. A handful of characters (mostly non-speaking). A couple of vehicles. A few locations: Woods/House/Service Station/Cemetery and that’s pretty much it!

About the writer: Cindy L. Keller When asked where her inspiration comes from, Cindy will tell you that she was brought up in a small town. A town whose movie theater played Double Features on Saturday afternoons. Many of those being Horror double features. She loves the old horror classics. Movies like Dracula, Creature, The Mummy, and Attack of the Killer Tomatoes. Horror without all the blood and guts, and she strives to incorporate that notion within her own writing.

Cindy is an award-winning screenwriter. She’s been a finalist at Page, finalist at Gimme Credit, Sixth place winner at American Gem, and the winner of Hellfire’s Short Horror Contest.

She has had two shorts produced, and has more shorts and features available for production. Cindy can be reached at skyburg “AT” hotmail

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About the reviewer: Gary “Rolo” Rowlands cut his teeth writing sketch comedy for the hugely popular Spitting Image – a show broadcast on national television in the UK. He has since gone on to write several high-concept features and can be contacted at gazrow at Hotmail dot com.

Friday, May 15, 2020

Out of Order by Luck Walker – short script review (available for production*) - post author Michael Kospiah

OUT OF ORDER (7 page short horror script) by Luke Walker

A night at the local multiplexturns into a nightmare for a middle-aged man with a dark past who learns that being sorry doesn’t necessarily mean you’ll be forgiven.

After months of social distancing, I really, really miss going to the movies. Sure, it’s nice to curl up on the couch and take in a flick on the tube, but nothing beats the movie theater experience. There’s something about the smell of popcorn in the air, the movie posters hanging on the wall, the red carpeting, the previews and that feeling you get when the movie’s about to start and the curtains in front of the screen open up – it just feels like an event. It feels special.

However, there are some things that I don’t miss. For one, the people. I’m not talking about ALL of them – part of what makes the movie-going experience so fun is the crowd reaction. But, once in a while, there’s that one person in the crowd that disrupts the experience for everybody. You know who I’m talking about. There’s the Chatty Cathy in the crowd giving play-by-play commentary. Then there’s that couple who brings their rambunctious children with them (turn off your baby!). And then, there’s that one guy who falls asleep and snores the whole time…

In Luke Walker’s creepy fever dream, Out of Order, Eddy, an overweight, middle-aged schlub, IS that one guy.

The story takes place at a local cinema, where Eddy comes to see a movie solo. After pigging out on movie theater snacks well before the flick even starts, Eddy falls victim to the comfy stadium seating and dozes off. After spilling soda onto his crotch, he wakes up to realize that he’s the only one there, the movie he paid a ticket for long over.

If you’ve ever been to a movie theater alone with nobody else there, you know just how creepy it can be. Butit isn’t until Eddy heads to the bathroom to clean himself up that things start to get REALLY creepy.

As Eddy has his wet crotch under a hand dryer, he hears something from a nearby stall with a handwritten out-of-order sign hanging up on the door…

After the sign falls off the door on its own, nasty sewer sludge comes flooding out from under the door, hitting Eddy’s feet. Disgusted, Eddy picks up the out-of-order sign and reads something on the back of it that sends chills down his spine…

And that’s when the nightmare officially begins.

Eddy realizes that he’s not alone after the bathroom stall door opens and lanky, ghastly man dressed as a surgeon (mask, rubber gloves, full regalia) reveals himself. With crazed, bloodshot eyes, this demented surgeon doesn’t seem very happy with Eddy. In fact, it’s safe to assume that he wants to hurt the pudgy loner… really, really badly.

I don’t want to give too much away, but let’s just say things get stranger and more terrifying for Eddy as the night goes on. Imagine “Inception”, but instead of a dream within a dream, it’s a nightmare within a nightmare… within a nightmare. But why is this happening to Eddy? What did he see on the back of that out-of-order sign? You’ll have to read for yourself to find out.

What I loved most about this script was that it had that midnight movie kinda vibe to it. I felt like I was actually at the movies again, I could almost smell the popcorn.

Packed with solid scares and horrifying imagery, Out of Order is a horror tale that will make you feel like you’re at the movies again. Any filmmaker who’s a true movie fan AND horror fan, will appreciate this one.

BUDGET: Relatively low – if you can convince your local cinema to let you use the location, it might save you a few bucks. But it’s all one location, three actors and a few extras.

ABOUT THE WRITER: Luke Walker, a part-time stay at home Dad to two young Padawans, is a self taught, award-winning horror screenwriter from Bristol, England. He’s best knownfor his short film Paralysis, screened at Macabro: Mexico City International Horror Film Festival. And for short script Rose, winner of ‘Lets Make It! Screenwriting Contest / Antic Horror – International Short Screenplay Contest / 13 Horror.com Film and Screenplay Contest. Luke can be reached at luke.ewoods (a) googlemail.com

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About the Reviewer: Michael J. Kospiah is the award-winning screenwriter of critically acclaimed indie-thriller, The Suicide Theory (79% Rotten Tomatoes – available on Amazon Prime, Itunes, Google Play, etc) and 2020’s upcoming Aussie thriller, Rage. His horror feature, They Never Left is currently in development.

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